One morning, it was a week before Christmas, very early in the morning when I was still sleeping on the shelf when I felt someone pick me up. I looked around wondering where I was going. Suddenly I got put down and I sat there for about five seconds until suddenly I got thrown into a plastic bag. After I fell to the bottom a few more things got thrown in on top of me and I was very uncomfortable. The bag got picked up again. I heard a door open and a then suddenly the temperature turned from very warm to very cold.
The plastic bag I was in got set down and I heard a car door close. I was very quiet for a little while and then I heard the car start. Where was I going! It was very scary inside this dark, cold plastic bag and I was really wishing that I was back in the warm, familiar, toy store.
After a while the car stopped and my plastic bag got picked up again. I heard another door open and my bag got put down. I got taken out of it and I got to look around for only about two seconds until I got stuffed into a box. I felt like I was sitting in that small, dark box for a long time. After a while I started to get very cold.
After I finally fell asleep, someone picked me up and from what I heard it sounded like I got put into another car on top of a pile of other boxes . That was the best part of my journey because it was very warm in the car and it reminded me of the toy store where I used to live. The car ride lasted for a very long time and I loved every minute of it. I was very tired after my very long day I felt like I needed to have a long, long sleep. So for the whole long car ride I had a very long sleep.
When the car finally stopped and I woke up, someone started to unload all the boxes. I felt the same feeling that I felt when I got carried out of the toy store. One minute it was very warm and then suddenly the temperature turned very cold. When we got inside the warm house, I heard paper being cut...... maybe it was wrapping paper and I was being wrapped up as a Christmas present. I sat quietly for a few minutes listening to the paper being cut until I felt my box being picked up. I looked out of a little hole that was on the side of my box and I that's when I saw it......... the thing that I've been waiting to see for my whole life...................... the giant, tall, beautiful............ CHRISTMAS TREE!!!!!! Was I dreaming or was this really happening to me?! Was my dream coming true? This was it! This was the Christmas that I would become a Christmas present! After about five seconds that I got to look at the beautiful Christmas Tree the wrapping paper got taped over top of my hole.
I felt my box being carried over to the Christmas Tree and then it got put down. I waited in the dark for a second until suddenly I heard a little girl say "oops!" and a Christmas decoration that she must of dropped hit the side of my box where the hole was and broke through the wrapping paper! I could see it again! I could see the Christmas Tree!! I was so happy that when ever I wake up I can look out the little hole and the first thing that I see is the Christmas Tree!
I couldn't wait until Christmas! Sometimes it got very boring just sitting in this box, but I'm just glad that my dream has come true and I have become a Christmas present and I am very that I have a very small little hole in my box that I can look at the Christmas Tree through.
It felt like I was waiting in my box for about five years (even though I was only waiting for one week) when one day I heard two people running down the stairs and yelling "Santa was here! Santa was here!". After a while I heard paper being ripped which must have been wrapping paper on presents being opened. I couldn't wait until I was going to be opened! I was getting really excited until I heard someone saying "Well, that's all of them". Suddenly I went from being very, very excited to very sad. That was it.... Christmas was over.... All the presents were unwrapped and it turned out that I wasn't a Christmas present. I went on that long tiring journey for nothing. I spent all my time from sitting in the toy store to getting squished into a bag, riding in the car, getting stuffed into a box, getting "paper" (not Christmas wrapping paper) stuffed on to me and then getting put under the Christmas Tree as a "pretend' present!!! this is the absolute WORST Christmas ever!!!!
After a while of sitting under the tree as a pretend present and feeling very sad and mad at the same time I heard someone say "What about this one?" and I felt my box being picked up. Someone started ripping the paper off of my box and the the box opened. "A Teddy Bear!" I heard a little girl say happily. She picked me up and hugged me. "This is the best Christmas present ever!" She said.
I hope that all the toys that get bought out of the toy store I came from get to have as good a journey and as great a Christmas as I did because even though earlier I said that this Christmas was the worst Christmas ever........it turned out in the end to be the best Christmas I have ever had and the best Christmas I ever will have for the rest of my life.
THE END!!
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